Formal letter

Sof Haolam Smola 26
Holon

November 3, 2012 

The Editor

"What's New"
(32) Allenby Street 32(מיותר)
Tel Aviv

Dear Editor,

I have read Jeffrey Hartmann's responding letter to your article "Righting a Wrong", in which you discussed affiramtive action for woman. Due to his outrageous claims, I've decided to write a responding letter which reflects the reality as it truly is. 

Mr. Hartmann wrote: "Today, women are equal to men in every sense – maybe even more than equal". I don't know about what Mr. Hartmann is talking about(phr.). Today, women are less equal than men in many areas. In the university, more men become doctors, probably because of the women's responsibility to the family, that stops them from developing their academic lives.

In addition, in most sectors, the public sector and business sector, representation of men in senior positions is much greater than that of women: ministers, judges, CEOs of firms and more. In the military, there are a lot of jobs which are blocked for women and available only for men. Furthermore, in the same jobs women earn less money than men. And the list goes on and on.
 

It is true that in the past, women's social class was worse than it is now, but women's discrimination still exists. Maybe the final thing that has to be done to create social equality between the genders, is that parliaments will legislate laws that will protect women's rights and class. Perhaps after that, we will finally be equal.

Sincerely yours,


Marry Poppins(please find a more conventional pen-name)

Very good work.
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Daphna   

"Love all, trust a few, do wrong to none" - Shakespeare

Many psychologists over the years have discussed whether evil is a trait which people are born with, or a trait which is acquired from the environment. This issue is still vague even today, as there is no scientific consensus about the source of evil. I think that evil is something that we acquire from our environment.

The first explanation is biological. Our body consists of milliards of DNA molecules. The Gene is a part of one DNA molecule. The Genes contain our genetic code, which is actually a code that determines our phenotypic traits: our eyes' color, height and more. Evil is a trait which isn't phenotypic, it is a trait which is associated with personality. So scientifically, it's impossible to claim that people are born evil, while there is no gene which contains information about our personality.

The second explanation is social. A child is like clay in the potter's hand, in this case the parents' hands. With close parental supervision, the child will probably grow to know what behavior is considered as evil, so he won't behave in this way. But without parental guidance , the child will grow without knowing what's wrong and what's right. He will just do whatever he wants, being evil sometimes without even knowing. Add negative peer pressure when the child turns into a teen, and you've got the perfect formula for being evil.

It's really interesting that there is still no proven accepted explanation to evil, which is unfortunately, such a common phenomenon. I hope that the reasons for evil will be found(ww.) soon, so our world will become a little happier place to live in. Perfect!
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Daphna

Parents - children relationships

Parents - children relationships are complicated at any age. Whether in young kids(phr.- a young age), or especially  in their adolescence, there are always struggles because of the unavoidable generation gap. A lot of researches have been done in order to explain what the reasons for the complicated relationships are, and if there are solutions for them.

I think that most of the struggles happen in the stage of adolescence, and are connected to the teens' desire for independence. At this age, teens' discovery of what life has to offer peaks, and precisely at this age two parents come and try to limit them. It leads to difficult disagreements between two adults who can't understand that their little babies aren't babies anymore, and angry, impatient teens, who want to do what they want the second they want it.

My relationship with my parents has known ups and downs. Until I was six years old I was the only child. In such a status I got almost everything I wanted. When my adolescence started, the relationship has become worse. Perhaps it was me who became intolerable, perhaps it was my parents' fault, but we couldn't stop fighting about every little thing. As time passed I've learnt what I can(gr.-could) say and what not. I think that they (have) also learnt it and they are still in a process of understanding my needs as a young adult coming into being. Our relationship is still not perfect, but I know and I've always known, that I have two parents, who I can rely on.

So struggles or not, at the end of the day, parents and teens are one family. So, we can sit and waste our time looking for solutions while the truth is that these relationships are so problematic, that they don't really have ones(phr. - not clear what you mean). Instead, all the(ww.-the whole) family can be united around the understanding that this is a temporary period. And until its end, all is needed(phr.)  is one thing - patience.

Better.
(93)
Daphna

Individual Sports

Sport is all forms of competitive physical activity. Hundreds of sports exist, from those requiring only one participant, through to those with much more participants. Some people prefer team sports, while others prefer individual sports. I tend to agree with those who like the latter.

Competing alone means that everything is up to you, and only you. Unnecessary complications which are connected to other team members? Nonstop worries about your team members' readiness for the competitions? And the worst – losing because of your team members? Not in this case. Playing alone gives you total independence. You are the only one who makes the decisions, the only one who is responsible for doing everything to win. You have a better chance to maximize your talent and show it to the world.
       

All these advantages don't mean that everything is so perfect. Sometimes, it's scary to think that if you lose, you are the only responsible. Representing your country all alone is a very heavy load, and not all the people have the strong shoulders which are necessary to carry it. A win is the happiest thing, but a loss means that the only one who will have to absorb the media's bites(ww.) is just you. Sportsmen or sportswomen, who feel the same pressure as you, can cheer up each other and calm each other – something which is so important, (and) that you miss when you compete alone.

In conclusion, although there are disadvantages to individual sports, I think that it is still more suitable for me than team sports. To deal with the pressure, to win and to know that all the credit is yours… there's no price to that feeling.  
Excellent!
(100)
Daphna

"By and by and finally you will succeed surely. You need more patience"

Whether for self esteem, or making money, almost all the people want to succeed in their lives. But, not everyone who wants to succeed can really do that. It requiers great efforts, and you must have some characteristics, that(מיותר) without which it's impossible to succeed. I think the most important characteristics are perseverance and sociability.

The way to success is never an easy one. It includes failures, obstacles and many other difficulties that you must deal with. That is why I think perseverance is such an important characteristic. Firm people will be able to continue their hard work despite all the difficulties, while people who aren't firm, will probably give up on their success. For example, I knew a girl  who had a difficult time with her studies in class. Still, she didn't give up and worked extremely hard at home and because of her perseverance she ended the year with some very good grades.

Although it's a cliché it's true – nobody is perfect. Each one has his own better and worse traits. That is why in most cases one person can't succeed on his own. A person who wants to succeed must surround himself with many people that have the necessary characteristics he doesn't have. People who want to create this cooperation (phr.), must talk to people in special ways that may attract them. Only social people know how to attract other people and win their trust, and this cooperation, when each one adds his special trait, leads to success. For example, I read an interview with a business man and he said that without his ability to socialize with his team, he would have never succeeded.

To conclude, no one is born successful, but to be born with some specific characteristics really increases your chance of being one day a successful person. And my suggestion is just to keep smiling – in our crazy world, doing it is the real success.

Better work. 
(96)
Daphna  

The life are a collection of dilemmas

Dilemmas are an integral part of our lives. Some are more important and some are less, but it's always difficult to decide because we can't stop the feeling that we lose things by giving up the other options. I want (ww.-would like) to tell you about a dilemma I had.

Two years ago I didn't know which class to choose: the Nahshon class or the scientific class. The two classes were similar but still, there were unique advantages to each class. In Nahshon there were only twenty five pupils in each(ww.) class, and the class offered to expand our entire knowledge. In the scientific class I had a lot of friends and a teacher whom I knew before, and I liked her. Finally I chose Nahshon because I was curious and I wanted to try something new.

Today, two years after this dilemma, I'm happy to feel that I have made the right decision. There is no price to the amazing people that became my best friends. I also learnt so many things which weren't a part of the common syllabus, and the most important thing - I felt like I found a place, a home, in which the personal development wasn't less important than grades.

I think that if I had made a different choice, I wouldn't have made so many new friends, I wouldn't have become so fulfilled(ww.), and actually, I just wouldn't have become who I am today.

Better. Well done!
(95)
Daphna